學(xué)員mika999: P36 4
Sales of adventure games increased steadily from 1995 to of action games increased steadily from 1995 to 1997,peaked at 25% in 1997,and then droped of sports games droped by 10% in 1996,remained steady in 1996 and 1997,but increased by 5% in of other games remained steady in 1995 and 1996 before a slight drop in 1997,and then recovered in 1998.
老師回復(fù):Sales of adventure games increased steadily from 1995 to of action games increased steadily from 1995 to 1997應(yīng)該用不同的詞來(lái)表述GO UP,peaked at 25% in 1997,and then droped of sports games droped by 10% in 1996,remained steady in 1996 and 1997,but increased by 5% in of other games remained steady in 1995 and 1996 before a slight drop in 1997,and then recovered in 1998.
表達(dá)很清楚,非常不錯(cuò)
不足之處是 應(yīng)該用不同的上升和下降的詞匯表達(dá)
一個(gè)詞匯用幾遍顯得很羅嗦,建議改正
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